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Immortal
02-13-2001, 11:11 PM
i posted this on meaningless' "crazy" thread.. but i liked it enough i thought i'd post it again. so um.. hope you all like it that much too. also, if it matters..this is my hundredth post
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title unravel the thread (for nicole) author zds date 2/13/01

unravel the thread, your point may be taken
i can't help you out, these rules that you're breaking
aren't set up for me they've been set down by you
and forefathers or mothers (whoever has this put you through)
i'm waking, you're quaking at the sounds of a voice
i'm chosen, you're molten lava with no choice
but to find a way out, find a way in
please stop this insanity before it begins
no one wants to lose you, please don't fade now
it may just be my innocence but i say "write it out somehow"
tell us all how you're feeling, i know that it works
and if it doesn't for you, then call me a jerk
and a lying professor of doom saying such
i'm just a homely follower of mr. acting tough
writing shit just to please them, writing shit just for me
haven't scribbled a word ('cept for you) in two weeks
i'm starving myself, i'm riddled inside
with thoughts of filthy evidence and the bones of my bride
who may be alive, may be well dead
i can't find a way, a way to get her out of my head
but enough about me and back on to you
i need you to stop what you put yourself through
this world's full of shit, but that's just how it goes
get the fuck out of bed or i'll cut off your toes
you can call me a liar you can call me a thief
but i'll fight you here and now in my cold winter briefs
i know pain, believe me.. it may not be the same
but i know what it's like for death to infest your brain
and take away from your personality, take away from your smile
i know what it's like and i've been rid of it for a while
if you fall to pieces it's so hard to get back up
but if you stay together, show the world that you're tough
and you don't need their shit like they think you do
go and piss on the grave of someone you knew
but never really liked, never really loved
or you could be the better person and calmly look above
to see the sky, the beautiful sky
this one thing alone is reason enough not to die.

i'm waking, you're quaking at the sounds of a voice
i'm chosen, you're molten - lava with no choice
but to find a way out, find a way in
please stop this insanity before it begins
no one wants to lose you, please don't fade now
it may just be my innocence but i say "write it out somehow"
tell us all how you're feeling, i know that it works
and if it doesn't for you, then call me a jerk.

poetrywriter
02-14-2001, 12:34 AM
Damn, that was incredible, Immortal. And that was a very, very nice thing to do. How the hell are you able to kick something that good out that fast? It would take me weeks just to get something even remotely close. Well, mine is not to question....just admire. Glad to see you back, my friend. Your work was sorely missed. And about the Valentine gift...I think it is an excellent idea. To hell with the other guy...you just do what you feel is the best thing. It will all work out in the end, my friend. Have a great night.

anescence
02-14-2001, 06:42 AM
Thank you. You are amazing. What a wonderful gift you have /images/smile.gif

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My mind not only wanders....it sometimes leaves completely /images/crazy.gif

blue_rain
02-15-2001, 05:22 PM
do any of you have any poetry up on the web? i have a web site full of words but i guess i'm a little too shy to be public about it.. (i'd pm it though)..what about any of you?

I can't stop myself listening
to the lady in the chains of sweetness
singing late in the night..drowning the dark



"there is a lot to be said for not saying anything at all" ~ j. a.

jennie10
02-15-2001, 07:38 PM
This should be on the top of this page forever.
I like the line: but to find a way out, find a way in. /images/cool.gif
Happy 100th post/images/laugh.gifI look forward to 100 more/images/smile.gif


"The doctors are running out of patients. I ran out of patience a long time ago." Henry Rollins

jennie10
02-15-2001, 07:57 PM
And the next hundred and the next hundred....../images/cool.gif

"The doctors are running out of patients. I ran out of patience a long time ago." Henry Rollins

anotherchild
02-19-2001, 07:55 PM
This is my favorite.....I'm printing it out and putting it up on my wall.

Thank you Immortal, you're amazing.

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