stomach pains

[Immortal]

with everyone posting wonderful songs and poems, i figured i'd make a small contribution as well. hope you like it

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title victim #1 author zds date 2/9/01

my hands are cold, i'm all alone
i've talked to you on end but never on the phone
you speak to me in verses, i nail the windows shut
i stop away from nothing, there are pains inside my gut
when i think of you fucking him.
when i think that you'll never be mine.
when i think of anything that means you're away.
when i think i'm fading with time.
a welcome in mind, a temple of souls
i'm the victim of your heart, a wheel with no control
my teachers say i'm meaningless, that writing's no fucking good
that rhyming is passe and shit, that i don't do the best i could
and then i cry alone in coldness knowing i'm not yours
i sit and wallow in my feces ignoring all my chores
sanity is brevity, liquids all run dry
"victim #1," they say, "will surely always die"
when i think of you fucking him.
when i think that you'll never be mine.
when i think of anything that means you're away.
when i think i'm fading with time.

[takemyhand]

Immortal that's amazing, so raw and powerful. Thanks for sharing.

Anne

take my hand, not my picture

[Ger]

I got this poem in my email a few days ago. It's from this weird guy, I'm sure he's from another planet & not familiar with earth's rules about love. However, maybe where he comes from, this is the way things should be? But anyway, here it is:

Fuckin' Make Me

Nyah, nyah...made ya look
(Ya dirty crook)
I knew I could, I have before
I will again
Spun this crazy web,
Wrapped you all up like a little fly
Spin, spin, spin, spin, spin, spin,
I'm really good at it
So now try and get out
Ha! You look so funny wiggling and
Crying
You didn't have to fly my way
You had a choice, but my, oh, my,
Haven't you got yourself in a state?
Which way to go?
Get you out? Let you go?
Get yourself out, let yourself go
Love you?
Fuckin' make me.
I dare you.
I fuckin' double dare you.

See what I mean? It might sound a little negative, but think about it with an open mind. He's not afraid to say what's on his mind, you gotta give him credit for that. I like this poem because he kind of makes fun of his immaturity but is challenging someone to brave the world & not take it so seriously at the same time. I really fucking like that. Oh, yeah, he's a fellow PJ fan, no duh.

Good to read you again, Immortal.

Love,
Ger

*All is Love, Love is All*

[anescence]

Good to see you again /images/smile.gif I love your poems..truly emotional,makes me feel

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My mind not only wanders....it sometimes leaves completely /images/crazy.gif

[Phil]

Nice job, immortal...