i sat down and wrote this one for you...

[Immortal]

... yeah, that's right.. i wrote this one for all 162 of you..

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title i'm called misfortune author zds date 1/17/01

getting chills when i think, i think too much about you..
fall to pieces if i'm careful, i'm careful just for you..
try to sleep, but sleep evades
lost it all inside my maze
you've taken me, taken my soul
like a blistering metaphor on this endless stretch of time
unable to type or complete this rhyme
my fingers won't move, frozen within
because i'm not innocent, and we're both soaked with sin
wouldn't it be so special if we could just get the fuck along?
not worrying about succession, just listening and breathing the song
words i write may be images to you
because out of everyone, you get it... somehow that makes it true
i'm called a prophet, i'm called a myth
i'm called a liar, a thing that doesn't exist
i'm called misfortune, i'm called a dream
i'm called your everything, but can't live up to the scheme
without the meanings i'll get lost in the doubt
i've found that anything is everything when you take a different route
away from beauty and excess, inside hearts of gold
my words may be rearranged, but the story is too old
i may not be what is advertised, but i love you more than him
and everything he says to you is a shit cup filled to the brim
but i've said my part, can't be anything but happy
for you and him, him and you.... i just wish he wouldn't slap me.

[anotherchild]

i was doing search on you so that i could read some of your old stuff and this post appeared at the top. i read it and i love it. i don't really know what to say to you because i've never been in this sort of situation before (i'm 15) but i do know what intense pain is like, i usually just sit down at my easel and let the pain pour out onto the canvas, been doing that a lot lately. anyway just wanted to know if it helps you, i hope it does. if you ever feel like talking please feel free to send me a pm.

[Immortal]

i don't paint, can't draw..not very artistic in that sense. words are my paint, and paper my canvas. don't feel bad about not knowing what to say in response to my feelings/frustrations/thoughts, if i were you (or anyone else) i wouldn't know what to say either. i'm only seventeen, so don't think that age really has anything to do with this type of situation.. it's been going on for three years now for me. but i don't know what else to say..other than thank you for reading..

[Phil]

Holy shit, Immortal... that fucking KICKS ASS! AWESOME lyrics in there! /images/cool.gif

[Highway23]

wow...all i can say...wow....

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[Johnny Carwash]

thank you Immortal/images/smile.gif
very cool/images/cool.gif

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[footstep29]

"because i'm not innocent, and we're both soaked with sin"

i LOVE that line...
thanks immortal... very very beautiful. you work magic with words.
*crystal*

*i let the past control my life, it brings me to my kness and i cannot hide*

[Phil]

Wow... if I could write like that when I was seventeen, I'd probably be opening for Pearl Jam by now. OUTLET that shit!

[anescence]

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[hedonist]

Awesome...thanks, Immortal....

[jymyben]

this was very nice.thanks for sharing

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[anotherchild]

are you feeling any better today? i want you to be happy. i don't mean like bouncing off the walls happy, cause i know thats not always possible, but i just don't want you to be too depressed. and in my last post i meant for that 'anyway just wanted to know if it helps you, i hope it does.' part to be about your writing. does it make you feel better to get those feelings out and onto paper? i really hope it does help you.

[Immortal]

well,.. i'm not feeling much better today,...in fact today is worse than yesterday or the day before.. but thanks for asking. i'm not too depressed or anything either.. it's just.. situations make me angry, confused, hurt, etc. .... but that's my fault.
as for writing,.. yeah, writing helps get rid of my frustrations.. but it also hurts, too.. to sit down and write is so exhausting sometimes, i break down. i'm sure you've heard enough about that though

[poetrywriter]

Nice one, Immortal.

Thanks.

[anotherchild]

((((((Immortal)))))))

feel better

sorry this is a little late but it's the first chance i've had to get on here, been studying too hard

[share]

thanks again immortal from 1/162th

i met mr O when i was 17 - seems like yesterday,
young enough to know what you need, old enough
to know what you've got

[Do_the_Evolution]

Beautiful poem. Thank you for sharing it with us.

People are people... so why should it be? That you and I should get along so awfully? DM