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Immortal
01-16-2001, 01:57 AM
title i'm hollow author zds date 1/15/01

i've let the wind blow through you for much too long, much too long
i write all day about you, i'm so wrong, i'm so wrong
about everything that's anything, something's always nowhere
anywhere is everywhere and nothingness is something less
than being there, being there..
just because i'm hollow doesn't mean that i won't drown
and if i was unfortunate, would i hear the sounds?
that you scream when you look at me, would they go away?
haunting me, destroying senses each and every day.
i write these things because you think these things
i'll cry if you make me. i'll die if you'd let me.
like the pains in my nose that won't simply go away
i'm stuck bleeding, yeah i'm bleeding, so much i can not do or say
what i'm meaning to, i'm meaning to tell you that everything's alright
that one day baby i'll hit the moon and never say goodnight
but first thing's first and i'll tell the tale
of how it'll never be. because being there, yeah being there,
something that we can't agree. on who it is, who it's not
finding out religions who've fought.
look at you, look at me. we belong together. you and him. not right at all.
just because i'm hollow doesn't mean that i won't drown
and if i was unfortunate, would i hear the sounds?
that you scream when you look at me, would they go away?
haunting me, destroying senses each and every day.

jennie10
01-16-2001, 10:32 AM
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"I allow myself true love, a love that is invincible-I love music" Henry Rollins

anotherchild
01-16-2001, 11:11 AM
another amazing post!!!! wow, i wish i could write like that. oh well i guess i'll just stick to painting.

keep 'em coming! they won't be overlooked!!!! /images/smile.gif /images/laugh.gif /images/cool.gif

Hund
01-16-2001, 02:47 PM
/images/smile.gif yes, it was cool. /images/cool.gif

poetrywriter
01-16-2001, 11:29 PM
You know Immortal..I read your work and sometimes I am content that
you go through what you do..just so I can read poems like this. This
was really great. I feel like a selfish bastard..I guess I am. But in
a way, if it weren't for the pain...would we have such great words
to read? It is a conflict I go through when I read your poems about this
person. Please don't take that the wrong way..I wish no ill will on you
in the slightest bit. I hope you understand. Just had to say that. You
are a becoming a great poet..despite your trials. And we (the audience)
enjoy great poetry because of them.

Thanks again. Have a great night.

brokenarrow
01-16-2001, 11:41 PM
Another beautiful...(yet painful) piece...
Thank you for sharing Immortal.

and don't worry, no one will let Poetrywriter's or your work fall into the abyss! I'm sure you'll both get some new fans, since this will still be a slower pace than Synergy...../images/smile.gif