"i wish that i could soar.....

[Immortal]

.....high above the mountains, peaks and valleys.. to a place that no one has ever imagined.. to a place where time doesn't exist..where nothingness exists...where your love for me exists..."

title on the moon author zds date 12:9:00

my face, it freezes when i see you touching him
i cannot talk together, i cannot breathe within
i love you more than he ever could, ever will
he thinks he is the leader, he'll surrender you to his pill
i cry for you. i live for you.
i laugh for you. i've died for you.
my limbs, they're foresaken
because of the breath you skip around
kissing him is like satan
arriving and overthrowing the crown
i love you more than he ever could, ever will
thinks he's setting you free, but forgets to pay the bill
i cry for you. i live for you
i laugh for you. i've died for you.
he's more important.
don't let me get in the way.
he's all that's good in your life.
i just stand in the way.
he's the most important.
because i'm just a figurehead.
standing here in silence
knowing i'd rather be dead.
phone may ring. but it'll end soon.
forgot to send a postcard
from me, up here on this moon.
my heart, it bled for you
more than once, twice, or three
i loved you more than i ever will again,
all you could muster was pity.
i am nothing compared to him, that's what it truly seems
and that all this bullshit is nothing, save for illforgotten dreams.
i cried for you. i lived for you.
i laughed with you. i'll die for you.

[Ger]

Hearts need it.

[share]

your soul, and your heart

one life, one love - reciprocated

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[poetrywriter]

Damn that was good, Immortal. It just keeps getting better..even
though the source is a painful one. Just out of curiosity..did you
ever try getting some of your work published. If not, you should
definitely look into it. Your poems are very engaging, and the
structure is tight. Shit I wish I could write this well. Anyway,
I loved reading this. Great job!

[anescence]

love is a powerful drug, thanks for sharing this

[takemyhand]

It's absolutely beautiful and I can feel the pain inside you. Thanks for allowing others to read this.

take my hand, not my picture

[poetrywriter]

Thanks for the kind words regarding my poem. Let me just say that
your poetry is not "boring" at all. I love reading it. Perhaps you
feel that it is because you write in the same style. Well, I have
come to find that if you read enough poetry from one specific writer,
you will start to notice that all the writing is "the same" in that
respect. I have also read many essays and such from various poets on
what makes a good poem, and in my search for an answer to this question,
I have found that opinions vary widely. I guess in the end it is up
to the reader. Its hard to write in a new style...everything has already
been done (as goes the post-modern philosophy). But the
words you create are unique in that they are yours, coming from your own
personal perspective and experiences. And to me that makes them so
enjoyable to read. I think its great how styles vary when you read the
poetry on the board (yours, mine, Mike Linder, and so on). And
the audience for it is very small..so yes, most of it tends to fall
fast. But the ones who do read it seem to really like it, so in that
respect I think it is still worthwhile to post it. It makes the synergy
bbs a little more interesting to read anyway (I personally don't think
it would be worth visiting if the only subject was Pearl Jam...I mean,
how many times can peoples favorite albums be put in ascending/descending
order anyway?).
Well, I see that I have started to ramble here. My point I guess is that
your poetry is really great. I think it is inherent for aritist on any
level to have a poor self-esteem for their work. But if one were to
become complacent, then their work would never get better. Keep writing..
poetry is the source.

[brokenarrow]

I don't even know what to say....
I think I've said how I feel about soulmates...
I just want you to know that this is so filled with painfull love.....I wish there were a way for all of us to ease it somehow...
love, broken>

ps....I also agree with everything poetrywriter said....people who write, tend to have a certain style....it doesn't mean their boring, it means...
It's who they are...
I tend to have a certain style when I write also...actually, I think when I write a story, it basically comes out the same way I talk...more of a conversation I guess...

don't change your style Immortal......it gets better and better all the time my friend../images/smile.gif