it's always been such a good way to do yourself justice..

[Immortal]

title PSALMS 7:15 author zds date december 2, 2000

wouldn't be such a secret if it wasn't such a lie
just to reclaim innocence.. it's just to say goodbye
your haunting gaze devours me so
my thoughts pour out, i can't control
what i say or do, no consequence as such
i just ...don't care.......don't even give a fuck
people, disarm me.. it's just too pointless now
i'm feeling independent, releasing strangely how.
like a razorblade in a cannon, i'll cut you straight on through
reckless to no abandon, stab it deeper til you're blue
just like i was at your delicate palms, thought you didn't care
but what about the psalms? you didn't seem to mind them when they're coming straight from there
and then the tables turn, suddenly we can't begin
and never will, that'll be the day
tomorrow is never.. i'll make sure it's that way
people, disarm me.. it's all just pointless now
i'm feeling independent, releasing strangely how.

[poetrywriter]

Nice work, Immortal. You know..I always enjoyed reading your poems since discovering them on the bbs. But I have to say that your work has slowly been getting a little better each time. This is not to say that it sucked back then...it just has been getting stronger and tighter. I guess its all part of the process. "like a razorblade in a cannon"...that's great, man. Thanks.

[Immortal]

[Immortal]

i know what you mean, pw... but somehow i think this'll be a different experience... or at least i'm hoping it's that way :)

[Immortal]

..guess it goes to show you, you can't judge a book (or poem) by its cover...

..and yeah, go ahead and save it if you want.. i've done better though.. look in the deeper pages, that's where the good stuff is..

[poetrywriter]

Still a great read, Immortal.
Funny, its great to see all the new faces here..lots of really
nice people. But I hope this doesn't mean that our poems will
plummet like they do on the synergy bbs. But oh well, I guess
we are used to it, right? Take care man.

[13throwcenter]

plummet? What do you mean?



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[anotherchild]

wow, that was good. i read the title and thought to myself, 'oh no, they aren't going to preach to me here too, are they?' but then i read the whole thing and it is amazing! if you don't mind i'd like to save it.